Should the first sentence read: The third, and last, Unryu class carrier to be completed for service, Katsuragi was caught in Japan's rapidly declining fortunes of war.
Rather than: "The third, and last Unryu class carrier to be completed for service. Katsuragi was caught in Japan's rapidly declining fortunes if war. "
And this sentence should read: Without aircraft, she was shifted between ports and was used as a transport. or She was shifted between ports without aircraft and was used as a transport.
Rather than: "Without aircraft she was shifted between ports and used as a transport."
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Should the first sentence read: The third, and last, Unryu class carrier to be completed for service, Katsuragi was caught in Japan's rapidly declining fortunes of war.
Rather than: "The third, and last Unryu class carrier to be completed for service. Katsuragi was caught in Japan's rapidly declining fortunes if war. "
And this sentence should read: Without aircraft, she was shifted between ports and was used as a transport. or She was shifted between ports without aircraft and was used as a transport.
Rather than: "Without aircraft she was shifted between ports and used as a transport."
Not sure about the first one, but whenever there are a lot of commas it probably needs a rewrite. How about the edits I made now?
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